Hello again,

I have again tried to do revisions to my paper, but am having a very difficult time doing so. I began by writing an outline of my draft as Dr. Lorde suggested. I found that I need to make some big changes. My next step was taking a draft and cutting out each paragraph to have all my reasearch out in front of me so when I begin to do my revision I could write about the magazine covers and just stick the research I have done into the areas where it will fit. I am having a bit of trouble with the revision. I am not sure if it is my approach or if it is my nerves getting to me. It is getting down to the wire so I NEED to get this revision done with, at least so I can meet with Dr. Lorde to see if I am on the right track this time. I sure hope this works out, I'll let you know how it goes.

Good Morning !

So after reading my past post I realized I mentioned the magazine covers without giving much detail about them. I have three cover in total and they are Glamour, Cosmopolitan, and Allure. They are going to be the focus of my final draft. I will analyze them on their pictures and on the headlines they have on them.

I chose multiple fashion magazines to prove that though they are different magazines, they all have something in common. One of those things being the ability to play on womens insecurities and provoke them to want to change their life style or buy a product. It is this idea that brought me to my thesis.

Well I have to get to class so sorry for the short post I will update you later on my revisions tonight.

Well I had my conference the other day, and it was interesting to say the least. I mean it wasn't terrible, but of course not what I was expecting. As in my previous posts I mentioned how I was having a very difficult time writing my 'final' draft for review and it showed i suppose. My introduction was not up to par, I did not state my thesis as I should have, and I had other errors within my introduction as well. Overall the paper needs MAJOR revisions as well. Dr. Lorde said that I should focus more on the magazine covers. My plan is to write more on the magazine covers and as I am analyzing them take paragraphs from my draft and place them where and if they fit in to my analysis. I am very nervous to begin the revisions process because I am terrified that it will turn out worse than my draft. As usual I will update you all on how my revisions are coming. Also I got my bibliography back and got an 85% on it which I am very pleased with.

Bye for now !

As everyone knows today is Wednesday, meaning today is my conference. I am very nervous and excited about this at the same time. I hope some of my essay can be salvaged for my final revision. Some of the questions I am going to ask Dr. Lorde include:

-What can I change about my thesis to have it better connect to my paper?

-What ares can I expand on/ shorten?

-Can I end my introduction with a quote like I did?

Oh man I have so many questions I hope she doesn't become annoyed with me. I signed up for the last conference of the day so I would not be taking up other peoples conference time, but I also have a chemistry exam today so i hope I am not late to that or that I have to cut my conference short. The goal I have today for my conference is to leave it feeling very confident about my essay and the direction it is going in so I can work on finishing it up this weekend. I will let you all know how my conference goes later, but now I must go continue to study for chemistry.

Hey just stoppin' by to leave a quick post !

I had my mother read over my essay today, and she thought it sounded alright. She suggested that I review my organization and possibly better explain in some areas. I know it is hard to read this not be able to see my essay, so you have no idea really what I'm talking about. I see an area to ass video and pictures, but I have no idea how to attach my paper, It must be very simple I'm sure, but unfortunately I lack heavily in computer skills. I am sure I can get someone to help me, and if you are reading this and you'd like to help me out by all means send something my way. I think I will do further review of my paper tomorrow, but again as I said in my last post I do not plan on making many changes till I have had my conference with Dr. Lorde, that is when the major revisions will happen.

Well that's it for now.

toodles.

I'm Back ! It's been a while I know but because of Easter weekend it's been busy.

Alright well It's done, not my final but the draft anyway. It may not seem like a huge stride, but as you guys can see from my last posts I was having a pretty tough time with it. I feel like I have to do some major revisions which I might work on tomorrow because I don't have class due to conferences, but I also just want to meet with Dr. Lorde see what she has to say so I can go from there. So maybe I'll just do some minor changes for now. I am going to be so excited for this final to be turned in and done with it, but I am also sooo nervous ! I feel like I have put in the work, but is it up to par? I sure hope it is. I will try to keep you guy updated on changes that go on. I think i might post my final up here for all of you to see if you are interested (My guess is no one will be, but hey why not right?)

Alright well I'll probably be back soon.

bye for now

AHHHHH ! Guys I am completely freaking out ! Alright so Monday I didn't touch my draft because I figured I needed a break from it, so I'd work on it and polish it up today (Tuesday) . Bad choice let me tell you.

So I'm looking over my draft and doing some revisions, but then i start to cut chunks out of it and then soon I look and I've gone from ten pages to seven, seven pages ! This is how I always get I feel so good about my work and then i second guess myself and end up ruining it. ughh. I feel that my argument is common sense and that I am not creating any new knowledge. I really wish we had had a conference before and after drafts were due, I guess I could have gone into office hours (which I've done) but I guess I didn't because I really felt like I was heading in the right direction. I just do not even know what to do right now, I sent Dr. Lorde and e-mail but I sent it pretty late and besides it would be really difficult to help my current situation over e-mail anyway, but seriously why does this always happen. I just wish writing didn't scare me so much, I do not wish I was world best writer, or anything close to that I just wish i could write without freaking out like I do, JUST FOR ONCE. As I've explained in a couple posts and to those of you who know me personally writing is a huge source of stress for me, it throws my stomach into knots and makes me light headed, it's not that I can't write it is just it scares me I guess you could say, what a strange thing to be scared about right? Alright well I better be off none of this is getting me any closer to getting my draft polished up and rewritten I guess you'd say.